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writes:Hi im Candice and i wont to no what you guys thing of my poem before i give if to my bf Here gos ...The momont that you became that part of me. I knew that your heart belonged to just me I love it when you look at me with your lovly blue eyes and stare at me untill your lips meet mine.There,s not one second of the day what i dont for get you. your my world my darling light shins on you. your apart of me so I LOVE YOU more than words can describe. i love to no that you are by my side soi can see you asleep right next to me huging you close to me. nice and softly.There,s no one in this world that i would change for you. because you mean everThing i could posialy wont. so i just wont to say i love you in each and everWay so i hope you stay in my life. i dont wont to lost what i love in life. because it Baby so bad cuts like a Knith..
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reader, JonnyBoyo +, writes (18 December 2008):
 The momont that you became that part of me,
I knew that your heart belonged to just me.
I love it when you look at me with your lovely blue eyes and stare at me until your lips meet mine.
There's not one second of the day that I forget you.
You're my world my darling light shines on you.
[NOT SURE WHAT THE LINE ABOVE MEANS]
You're a part of me so I love you more than words can describe.
[HAVE REMOVED THE CAPITALS ABOVE]
I love to know that you are by my side so I can see you asleep right next to me, hugging you close to me, nice and softly.
REMOVE THE REST, IT'S TOO MUCH:
There,s no one in this world that i would change for you. because you mean everThing i could posialy wont. so i just wont to say i love you in each and everWay so i hope you stay in my life. i dont wont to lost what i love in life. because it Baby so bad cuts like a Knith..
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reader, samsmommy  +, writes (18 December 2008):
 I hope you don't mind if I kind of proof read for you? I don't know if you're just making mistakes because you're typing it or if you just don't know how to spell it, so I'm going to retype it for you.
The moment that you became a part of me
I knew that your heart belonged to
Just me
I love it when you look at me with
Your lovely blue eyes and stare at me
Until your lips meet mine
There's not one second of the day that I
Forget you, you're my world my darling, light
Shines on you. You're a part of me, I LOVE YOU more than words can desribe.
I love to know that you are by my side so
I can see you asleep right next to me, hugging you close to me. Nice and softly.
(I don't know what you mean here)There's no one in this world that I would change for you, because you mean(are) everything I could possibly want. So I just want to say I love you in each and every way, I hope you stay in my life. I don't want to lose what I love in life, because it baby so bad cuts like a knife.
I hope you aren't offended that I corrected you, and I hope I helped.
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reader, anonymous, writes (18 December 2008): please candice, it is very sweet, but i could not even get to the bottom of the page because (poetic license aside) the spelling needs work.
oh, by the way, it might be a bit "overdone". You wouldn't want him to run screaming would you? guys aren't as interested in the soft and squishy part of love as women are.
my opinion.
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reader, natedawg61 +, writes (18 December 2008):
i think that your words are strong like the way i feel about my gf but if he doesnt feel the same if your just another girl than you might scarehim off be careful on what you do
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reader, anonymous, writes (18 December 2008): HiYour poem is beautiful, like your heart....and i hope you never loose your gift. Never fear an open honest heart, it will keep you strong through life.Via con dios.
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